The brain drain Arab)
(migration of Arab scientists)
*First draft*
* Arab Migration to western countries*
Migration is defined as a movement of people from one country to another . The migration of Arabs to the American continent dates back to the second half of the nineteenth century. Migration has many axes that can be discussed. First of all its types , it can be divided into first, optional that made by individual initiative and usually a desire to move to a new home for the better. Second, Forced migration (displacement): to be made by an external force imposed against the will of individuals or groups, for example 700 thousand Palestinians have been displaced after the 1948 war outside of Palestine . Third, Permanent migration: individual or groups migrate to a new country and the return to their homeland may be possible. Fourth, Temporary migration: where the individual or groups migrate to a new home on a temporary basis in order to improve educational attainment or the living situation but they return to their native country at the end. Arab Migration to western countries has its justifiable reasons ,benefits and demerits as they are mentioned later.
Migration to western countries due to several reasons that can be subdivided into political: like Political instability, the spread of bribery, corruption , nepotism and weakness of public freedoms .The economic dimensions of the Arab brain drain(the migration of the Arab scientists): such as Lower standard of living of the scientific competencies because the income level of the learners and the scientific competencies is generally low and below the level of income of merchants , professionals, artists and others, what urges them to migrate to a country that appreciate science and scientists. Finally ,the recreational purposes like tourist visits: a lot of Arab immigrants have left their homes, and migrated to a new country, after visiting this country in temporary tourist visits and they were pleased to live there.
On the one hand , some people support the idea of migration as there are some benefits of migration to western countries ,they are as the following: Return of Material, it varies from state to state, as America, allows the transfer of any amount of money that immigrant wants out , Arab Republic of Egypt, for example, benefits the transfer of funds of migrants, whether they are scientists or others, including more than $ 3 billion a year is the sum of the Suez Canal and cotton. Also Contribution to solving the unemployment problem and relieving its effects . In addition, increase scientific knowledge :most scientists migrate to the advanced industrial countries as they have a good environment for them to exercise their competence, this thing that was missing in their native land ,this outcome contributes to the progress and the prosperity of their homeland later. Furthermore , As the presence of Arab scholars in developed countries, contributes to define their country, culture , their ideas and their political beliefs.
On the other hand, people who reject the idea of migration think it has some dangerous demerits like Beneficiary countries of the Arab brain drain: for instance, The growing influence of America due to the increasing migration to it, what made its population increased more its normal rate, (as) 33% of those who received the Nobel Prize in America were immigrants. Many studies indicate that America wouldn't have achieved all this progress without the immigrant scientists such as Albert Einstein, Farouq Al Baz and Ahmed Zewail.Also,research centers and universities are deprived of the Arab scientists who are needed to teach at universities. What's more, lack of social balance: that most migrants are young males and their marriages to foreign women deprived their females of marriage and for that we see in the Arab world now and there are more than 15 million women are spinsters.
In conclusion, migration to western countries is a double-edged sword and we have to make the best use of its benefits . I agree with the temporary migration as we can transfer Scientific expertise and technological progress to our country through sending scientific missions and scholarships. So it is essential for the Arab States to develop their potentials so that they can attract their scientists and make them stay in their home countries. Because they can contribute and make radical changes in the quality ,development, progress and prosperity of the Arab nation to achieve its civilization. Also, I disagree with the permanent migration as the new offspring of the Arabs may don't have real belonging to their homeland .They also acquire behaviors that are inconsistent with their traditions and religion like drinking alcoholic beverages, Family disintegration and moral deviation. As it's said East or West, Home is the best . so we have to do our best to elevate our country to be a source of pride and dignity to us.
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Your draft is excellent. The pictures you have used are very expressive and convey your point of view.
ردحذفbut you have to work on your sentences. Your sentences are long and sometimes lose the correct meaning.
I recommend that you speak about each kind of migration in a separate paragraph, then express your point of vie in a seprate paragraph.
Yet, there are some corrections that you have to do such as
1. by individual initiative and usually a desire to move to a new home for the better( a better life).
2. Migration to western countries (is)due to
several reasons that can be subdivided into political
3. what urges them to migrate to a country that appreciate(s) science and scientists.
4. Finally ,the recreational purposes like tourist visits: a lot of Arab immigrants have left their homes, and migrated to a new country, after visiting this country in temporary tourist visits and they were pleased to live there.(divide this sentence into two or more sentences with a complete meaning, take care of the structure of the sentences.)
5. On the one hand , some people support the idea of migration as there are some benefits of migration to western countries ,they are as the following: Return of Material, it varies from state to state, as America, allows the transfer of any amount of money that immigrant wants out , Arab Republic of Egypt, for example, benefits the transfer of funds of migrants, whether they are scientists or others, including more than $ 3 billion a year is the sum of the Suez Canal and cotton. ( a very long sentence and I dont understand what you want to say here)
6. the Arabs may don't (may mot)have real belonging to their homeland .
Mannon Excellent work .I like it a lot .You gave a pleasant examples that supporting your ideas, opinion and your hole draft
ردحذفhi mna your essay is excellent ,your opinion is clear , your pictures are funny and expressive
ردحذفSo nice essay Yoya . I like this useful essay. It is informative and has a specific purpose . it has a clear main idea. Your introduction and conclusion are interested. the ideas are organized . your sentences are clear
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I get so wonderful information from your wonderful essay. I expect a bright future for you Manonty . very good essay my friend Manon . Allah protects you